In my last post I mentioned various attempts to encourage students to write in a more engaging manner. I was looking for less clunky, less mechanical (you’ll get the “less, less, more, more” reference in a minute) and with more joy in words, more fun in their writing.
Here are a few more ideas that have worked (stolen from @Xris32’s sentence project again – I can’t recommend it enough).
The “more, more” sentence seemed particularly popular with my students as their worked to rewrite the end of Dracula. I think they liked the dramatics of it.
- The more screams, the more pain, the more death, the more doom.
- High above the clouds I watched the pieces shatter, more pain, more weeping, more sorrow.
- The more he thought, the more he cared, the more he died inside.
- He was tired, the more tired he got, the more angry he became, the more angry he became, the more violence controlled him.
- The more she watched, the more she died as well.
Having said that, the “less, less” sentence was not to be outdone.
- The less he backed off, the less it hurt, the less he felt, the less he cared.
- The less he succeeded, the less he valued.
- The closer he approached, the less she felt joy, the less she breathed, the less she lived.
More sensational sentences to follow soon…